Thursday, November 11, 2010

CAT 4.1

At this time there’s a topic that practically everybody has an opinion about, its children and teen spend too much time “plugged in “ and this causes health problems including obesity. A great many people think that technologies as the internet it’s access to pornography, gambling, drugs, weapons and radical ideologies, as well as computer fraud and identity theft. On the other hand, some people like teachers and parents plaudits the benefits of technology to make schoolwork more fun while setting guidelines that improve their health. Everyone wins. In my opinion, I strongly support the second proposal.
                First of all technologies, internet are a system of communication, at this time, internet become an important way that people use to communicate. Remember, these kids spend many hours a day connected and are in contact with friends through social networks, texting and other tech pipelines. I think, they will have a great opportunity to expand their knowledge also a helpful for them to reach their goals in the future. On internet they will learn about another people, cultures, places, and music and that can be a real aide in schoolwork.
                However, there are many negative things when you use internet. For instance, a child can have easy access to pornography, as well computer fraud and identity theft. To set up the problems, many companies provide software can manage access to internet. In fact the parents have the totally control of the internet connection and the entire website.
                Another reason I support technology with schoolwork, is the fact that the technology will help them develop and grow up with a positive ideologies. For example, online course, they will allow to logon to their classroom from home and any other place as well. If a students taking an English course and math course online, he or she will allow  doing their home works and quizzes online, they save time and money; they don’t have to worry what clothes they need for tomorrow, because they are at home and enjoy their courses by internet.
                Finally, we can easily see from these few examples of the most important reasons we can using their love technology to make schoolwork more fun while setting guidelines that improve their health. Students would be better at school, the internet would have a reputation where students spending good time and help them to have an excellent academic results.

3 comments:

  1. your ideas and examples you used in your essay are good. you need to work on your grammar a bit and word choice . good essay structure

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  2. Very good essay. Many good points and bad points about the internet.

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  3. I would like you to start using a less general opening for your essays. I would strongly suggest you start with the phrase "In his articel entitled XXXX, YYYY argues that . . . ." The opening you have may turn readers off. It is much better to get right to the point. Also avoid any "ACT" style language like "I strongly support the second proposal". Use the authors' name instead and specifically state what you are agreeing with.

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